Artist: Jack Vettriano “His Favourite Girl” (oil on canvas)
The phone he had given her rang. His voice, his tone, direct and requiring no response.
“21.47.
Black underwear.
You know where to come.
Just open the doors and wait.
Ti amo, piccolo”
She went over his words again and again. She felt she had forgotten something, missed something and her skin shrunk a little around about her.
Eyes closed she took a breath and slid the doors apart.
She was hit by the unique and intoxicating smell of the room and she flushed at the memory. She opened her eyes, looking directly into his.
He saw the flicker of fear and his cocked twitched. He smiled at her and his eyes told her of his pleasure in her so far. She exhaled slowly and took in the surroundings.
The men sat at either side of him, both dressed smartly. The oak panelling made the room dark but there were several small spotlights dotted around. The table was at one side, decorated only with their discarded napkins, no longer required as they retired to the club chairs to wait.
At one end of the room stood a large saltire of dark wood and to the right of it, a sort of leather horse, such as the type which would be found in an old gymnasium. She shuddered at the thought of how exposed she might become and what might be going to happen.
“Vieni qui, piccolo!” he said crooking his finger to signal she should join him.
Quickly she entered the room and knelt at his feet, eyes cast down.
So tantalising Missy ?
I am never sure with flash fiction if it seems finished or not.
Well in my opinion you end them well every time….
Thank you kindly sweet. It is all pretty experimental at the moment. I love Vettriano though so when I saw the prompt I had to try to write something. I went a lot shorter than usual. ?
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Can’t wait for the rest of the story.
I will have to have a think about it. I have a few ideas ?
Missy how intriguing, this is a VERY juicy snippet! I wish there was more because I like how dark and exposing it is promising to be. Great writing.
Thank you. I was trying to make it short enough to be a flash. 🙂
Such possibilities!
Endless ?
“He saw the flicker of fear and his cocked twitched.” The feedback loop in this for me is soooo fucking hot
Mollyx
Thank you. I am trying hard with fiction. I enjoy it but still get stuck with going beyond reality ?
You could definitely take this further Missy – lots of angles that I can see 😉 x
I will have a think about that. Thank you ?
that is so hot!
Oooo thank you so much ?
A hot story, I hope there is more to come!
Thank you – I will think about another instalment
lol 🙂
I love it when my cock twitches, and it did as I read your story, Missy.
Well that is praise indeed 🙂 thank you
Ah! This is so good. The clithanger definitely left me wondering about what might happen next well after I was done reading. 🙂
Thank you – your feedback is really appreciated. I had tried to keep it short for the flash fiction requirement but I may experiment with where to go next 🙂
Ohhhh, that fear that you’ve missed a detail and won’t be the good girl you’re desperately trying to be. I know that well.
And also this is such an erotic tease…and I love it!
Thank you Kayla. I would quite like to be there myself ?
Ooo. The things to come! So many sexy things
I think so. Not sure where I will go with it though. ?
Ominious. Mysterious. Sexy as hell. What a great bit of flash!
Oh wow. Thank you. I have been really encouraged by the positive comments and appreciate you saying that ?
Nice mood you set, Missy… the pommel was a nice touch.
Thank you ?
Very sexy and tantalizing! Seems our ideas were very close. 😉
Thank you ?